It's a good start! However don't forget to include the environment and explain in simple terms to those Trump voters and other low-information voters exactly how you plan to accomplish this. Use simple easy to remember slogans. You really need to reach out to the low-information voters. Hillary had a great platform had a great plan but only those who are paying attention and had the education to understand it were excited about it. Try to remember that most people do not pay attention until just before the election. You have to put your plan into exciting terms. Ask Bernie he is good at working up a crowd.